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Read Betwixt the Lines There was a sort of look in his eyes Divinity reflected from the sky Intimacy in his disguise Truth in his lies Mirth in his byes A je ne sais quoi in his elaborate replies Restraint in his cries A fall in his rise Alleviation as he fries Amelioration in his demise There was more to him than a look could realize

Posted by: Idiosyncratic Quirk Thu Sep 24, 2009 @ 03:57am

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Ninth Pariah
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Commented on: Sun Sep 27, 2009 @ 02:49am


	You do like your paradoxes. It sounds happy at first, but slowly drifts to sadness. Particularly those last three lines. "Amelioration in his demise," pretty depressing, that. Makes me wonder what made it better without him. Although the line before it sounds like a reference to the electric chair. Still, makes me wonder what inspired this. I like the rhyme scheme as well. Simple, but it flows like a freestyle rap. Except maybe the french, there. I don't speak French, so I couldn't say for certain.

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