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Well, I need some opinions about an Aidou Hanabusa and an Akatsuki Kain story [4 all you Vampire Knight fans,if there are any -.-''] that I'm trying to publish on quizilla, so just comment on if it's good or bad. If it's bad, please don't bash me for it, alright question crying

~Flaming Silver Icicles~Aidou Hanabusa/Akatsuki Kain~Chapter One: Meeting

Reine’s POV
Today’s my birthday and it’s supposed to be one of my favorite days, but, oddly enough, my day just keeps getting worse and worse every second. That’s how it usually feels like now, ever since that day; the day my dad left and completely ruined my life and my well being. My parents have always hated me for what I am, but I usually paid no mind to it, but today-today was completely different. My dad left my mom 4 days ago, he said he was leaving because I exist, and now my mom was actually beating me for it. She’s never beaten me, even if she completely loathed me, she’s never beaten me.
“You ungrateful child!” she screamed “All the things I’ve done for you, and you try to run away from me!” “You’ve never done anything for me, except blame me for all the wrongs you’ve done in your life!” the moment I said that, she kicked my side with her black stilettos and walked away with anger showing in her face, therefore leaving me curled up on the ground, bleeding and groaning in pain.
I crawled to the door when my mom left, holding my side in the process, grabbed the doorknob, and dragged myself out of the house.
*Why is my life like this?! What have I ever done to deserve all this pain?!” I asked myself, *Why is it that every time I come down the stairs, I always get beaten up for it?!” I felt a tear slide down my cheek. I touched my cheek in pain and stared at my fingers. I expected to see my tears stained in blood, but what shocked me was that my tears were a shining silver color. “What the-” I was stopped mid-sentence by someone walking towards me.
When the person stopped and stared at me, I noticed his features. He was about 5‘10, had short wavy blond hair, bright blue eyes, and a healthy thin and pale complexion. I stared back at him for awhile as he kneeled down before I started screaming in pain. “Are you alright?” he asked, “Nah, I’m perfectly fine,” I said with obvious sarcasm in my voice ,“This is no time to be sarcastic, we have to get out of here before you bleed to death,” “Why should I go with you when I don’t even know who you are!” Instead of answering my questions, he just picked me up; I didn’t struggle because I was in pain. He started to say something, but I couldn’t hear because everything went black...
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I'll Show You A Sweet Dream...The Next Night
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Chapter Two: A Vampire's Bite; A Werewolf's Awakening will come out soon! (I'll be posting the chapters on gaia & if I get good reviews then I'll see if I can get it on Quizilla, since it's being retarded... stare