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You all just got pwned by Oblivion_Xye
The Paths
A path to day
A path to night
A path to the dawn
A path to the dusk
The paths were carved out of the ground
Using no energy or sound
People just walked down them so many times
They eventually formed these very lines
Do the paths ever cross?
Do people ever get lost?
The answer lies at the end
The end of the paths

A path to day
A path to night
A path to dusk
A path to dawn
These paths were used by all
Until the great rise and fall
Where people would walk inbetween the paths
Not knowing where to go or what wrath
They may face at the end of each
If that they even reached
The answer lies at the end
The end of the paths

A path to day
A path to night
A path to dusk
A path to dawn
These paths have stories not known to all
Stories of justice and some are just tall
Tales of wonder and magics
Tales of heroes and tragics
They all walked down them
All walking to an mend
A mending of earth
That no man has yet unearthed
The answer lies at the end
The end of the paths

A path to day
A path to night
A path to dusk
A path to dawn
Have you yet to choose?
I suggest to lose
Lose the feeling of following the other
Maybe even carve another
Another path for others to follow
Where you began to hollow
Hollow a road to the place of Care
Only you can know what is there
The answer lies at the end
The end of the paths

The end of the paths...to light






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ExoticDewDrop
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commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 05:41pm
grlie! i love it... as a poet and a reader also... i loved how u stared each couplet!
-Dewii


commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 05:44pm
I like it, and see nothing you can do to improve. Wait that sounds mean. It sounds good to me, and you seem to have everything perfected! That's better. The repetition is nice, and I like the theme.



TheFullmetalNinja
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XIII=Unlucky
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commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 05:46pm
good job Oblivion I'm glad that you are friend! Great poetry i like the kh theme in it heart heart heart heart heart


commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 06:08pm
Once again I am amazed by the poetry. Well done once more.



Red Samba
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Clow lord of darkness
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commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 06:50pm
that really good your aswsome i mean it Plz write more bye for now


commentCommented on: Sat Dec 09, 2006 @ 06:53pm
I liked it alot, but the only thing i didnt like is how you ryhmed almost every line (srry! dont hate me sweatdrop )



I heart Izuna
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cowz_rule018
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commentCommented on: Sun Dec 10, 2006 @ 12:24am
you are such a good writer. I love how you repeated the 4 lines over again. give it too mrs. meyer and maybe she'll give it to all of her classes to read and it can be on the next final! biggrin


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