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phoeniz girl:chapter1: the red phoenix
fanfiction
note:the name in this fanfic is from beyblade kai hiwatari. this is only a fanfic. if i want to be original i would change the name
warning. the details and legends are not true.


chapter 1: the red phoenix

kai hiwatari a normal high school student lives a life of loneliness. he was known as
the lone wolf in his school. he was always alone never smiling or talking to any body for the matter.

then one day his life change as when he was walking home he saw a red light. then from the skies a red bird lew in the skies. it was the brightest and most beautiful

thing he had seen. he was mezmerized by it, but then a dark winged monster was following it. he decided to follow them. they landed at the temple. then there he saw the phoenix land and burn turning itselef to a girl. she had golden blounde hair and blue diamond eyes. she was glowing red all over her body. she was adorned in a red sacred armor and she had red phoenix wings , but she was wounded. they battled. then suddenly the girl was fainting in pain. the monster attacked. kai leaped and pushed her away.
the girl was then surprised to see his face

"prince!" she said.
they then continued to run from the monster.

"take this" she says as she gives a bracelet adorned with foreign inscription. kai took it.

"now call upon the magic words. oh great dog rise and slash." she said.
kai didn't know why but he followed her and spoke the magic words. then a large dog ina form of spoke appeared from kai's hands and slashed the monster. i was shocked. then another monster came. the girl blocked the attack with her body. then destroyed the monster with a flame from her hands.
she felt . she was bleeding terribly. kai picked her up. he was quiet.

"prince kai i will protect you for sure." she said.
"how could you say that your injured?"

"i am only physically weaken. i will only burn, but i shall revive in my own ashes."
she pushed him away and then she burned suddenly. the fire stopped and all that was left was her ashes. he looked at her ashes then was confused. he then turned back and said to himself, "what the heck. what happened?"

"i was revived." says a small young voice. when he looked back at the ashes and there was a small girl that looked like the girl from before. she looked like as if a 3 year old girl.

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  • User Comments: [3]
    Apoy
    Community Member





    Fri Feb 24, 2006 @ 06:16am


    for me, this first chapter gives a promise that i might enjoy reading this fanfic. although, some words were spelled incorrectly, i'd say it's good. i'll definitely read the next chapter. goddessanime, goodluck on finishing this one. i hope this time, there would be an ending. so as for your other stories... smile


    princessbeyblade
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    Wed Mar 22, 2006 @ 09:51am


    cool still lots of grammar problems


    Josh856
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    Fri Dec 29, 2006 @ 07:21pm


    nice decision on words i like ya story


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