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Idiosyncratic Quirk
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Here's how to temper the iron you hath wrought.
You use tortured, and its derivatives TOO much. If you are gonna focus on it for effect, use it a bit less in description, and more in the keylines.
Also, a few grammar errors, nut minute.
I approve, and enjoyed this thoroughly.