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It was fun being an elementary but i'm already high school,its my first day and i dont know why can i see peoples name confused .Then i bump into a girl named Lily Lowee i was surprise burning_eyes she's like a beautiful flower.I had a crush on her heart heart heart and then a guy came up he knows lily lowee i became mad stressed stressed .Then the bell ring the class is gonna start and i'm sad but when i came to our room i was delighted i saw lily and then i smile lol
She laugh at me and i laugh too.Then when it was lunch i told her if i can go eat lunch with her
she said Yes i was super happy 4laugh blaugh .Then when i was eating lunch with her i told her if she like eating hotdog then she said dont said that word to me i hate it and i have been shocked wahmbulance wahmbulance .Then it was afternoon i saw her coming home i told her sorry for saying that word she said its ok i should be the one saying sorry the she smile and she was super cute i smile to her too thats my first day of high school life see ya.
- by Admiin Office Faq |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 12/19/2008 |
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- Title: High School Life
- Artist: Admiin Office Faq
- Description: This is a story of a boy named Ryuki Azawa a 13 year old who just became high school will he have a great high school or not.
- Date: 12/19/2008
- Tags: high school life
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Comments (3 Comments)
- CRM96 - 02/04/2009
- Try putting a 'd' on the end of words that need one. I really don't understand any of it, some boy went to school, he saw a girl and liked her, he asked her to lunch and she said not to say that word....what word?! It wasn't really a story.
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- Spiraling_into_oblivion - 12/19/2008
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Needs better flow of sentences.
These would be what we call "dead" sentences, they don't really paint a picture. Be more descriptive. - Report As Spam
- jakekumori - 12/19/2008
- HEy dude this is awesome very awesome
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