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Cat and Mouse Lost in a simple game Cat and mouse yet we stay the same Chasing After me ANd I turn and do the same to thee AM I suppose to be happy if all I ever wanted in life... Comes with a price ALways seems to be in my grip But even I know I'm bound to slip, No light to proceed at the end of the tunnel ALways half empty and never full There is no subtle change Not something new to rearrange I guess I'll just keep slipping down forever and ever round and round...-unless WOnt you be the hand for me Or be a new light for me to see? Ieri Aedile · Thu Feb 15, 2007 @ 02:36pm · 1 Comments


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	I liked this one! Very thoughtful and sweet. Although, you break up your rhythm a few times. I am also seeing odd rhyming patterns, actually, the lack of patterns. It was going great until you get to tunnel. All the other words have a corresponding rhyme except tunnel and full. On the plus side, this poem made me smile, so I will give you a bonus for that. I think cute describes this poem the best. Offline Cute n Koi · Community Member · Fri Feb 16, 2007 @ 05:05am

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