Bleeding

• Artist: I-Danisnotonfire-I
• Description:
• Date: 07/15/2010
• Tags: bleeding

I'm bleeding here in silence
I'm dying here in pain
I can't get past the violence
I see nothing but the blood stain

You pierced my heart knowing,
If you left it would shatter
I don't know where this is going
but I know it doesn't matter

Trickling, the blood still leaks,
here from the hole in my heart
tragedy, your spirit still creeps
and it's tearing me apart

When you promised me,
I'd never be alone
I was too blind to see,
I had always been on my own

Weaker my body grows
as I grip the floor to hold on
This is the time we all know
I come to accept that you're gone

Comments

[I-Danisnotonfire-I]

Thank you very much! ^-^ I really appreciate the comment and I thank you once again for your kind words.

[The-Poison-Muffin]

I admire how you use the changing perspective in this, it is quite a delicate thing to 'master', if you will (for lack of a better word). This poem doesn't have potential, it's reached is maximum brilliance. Don't be a critic to your own work, this is quite a masterpiece.