Your Fault

• Artist: Fayte Vayne
• Description: A poem i wrote to my boyfriend, i guess its kinda true. I haven't given it to him yet lol. Let me know what you think! vote for meeee!!!! (P.S. my main gaia account is xXxEmo SprinklesxXx add me if you want)
• Date: 03/08/2010
• Tags: your fault sprinkles fayte love

I find myself thinking and dreaming about you.
I hope that you do the same.
Not much longer can I play this game.
No one wants us together.
Why cant they see?
it should just be you and me.

I'll cry when they say we cant.
I'll cry when I see you that morning.
I'll cry when you pull me close.
and I'll cry when you say "It doesn't matter".
When I know it does.

You will convince me to run away with you.
and when we do I know my guilt will ruin me.
Eventually it is shaken from my soul.
Just enough to enjoy being with you.

I'll cry when they say Come back.
I'll cry when I tell them I'm happy.
I'll cry when you pull me from them.
And I'll cry when you say "Don't leave me".
So I won't.

I write on these frayed pages my imminent demise.
I write on these pages why I ended up so perfect.
I Write on these pages why I'm so happy.
And its all because of you.

Comments

[nbetweener]

First things first: if you're going to write, learn the tools. Spelling, grammar and knowing which words to/too/two use are all important.
I like the use of repetition, the "I'll cry" and the "I write" they work well.
Your middle stanza goes from talking about the future to talking again in present tense...leaving one a bit confused.

[jayke2010]

i like it !!