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At night I close my eyes
and slowly float away.
To far off lands of color
and waters clear as day.
I leave my worries far behind
and take with me my soul.
The others look on in envy
at the happisness I've stole.
Oh, this glorious place of life
overflows with love and light.
I wish I could bring to you this world
and hold on to you so tight.
We won't ever have to return to
the colorless world of hate.
The others would be left behind
to face up to their fate.
And we could hold each other forever
in this beauty until the end.
Our hearts won't have to hurt anymore
or listen to truths that bend.
Yet in the morning I open my eyes
to a gray that makes them tear.
The barred windows are like toothy grins
beckoning me to come near.
I cry to myself silently
for dreams like that are strong.
And they always feel so real
no matter how short or long.
Your voice is suddenly in my head.
"Close you eyes," you say.
So I take heed and close them tight
as we slowly float away.
- by (Forever)Yours |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/06/2009 |
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- Title: We Slowly Floated Away
- Artist: (Forever)Yours
- Description: I was sitting in my room and it just came to me. I hope you guys like it. Constructive critisism is always welcome.
- Date: 08/06/2009
- Tags: slowly floated away
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Sunafire - 09/14/2009
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The rhyming and structure is really good apart from a few absent punctuation marks.
This is a nice representation of how you feel, you may want to explore these more thoroughly and deeply and find more to your emotions through poetry.
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- (Forever)Yours - 08/06/2009
- Thank you. 0.o Your name is awfully familiar to mine.
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- ForeverYours1 - 08/06/2009
- OMG. I love it. I wish my stuff was as good as this.
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- BruceLee2000 - 08/06/2009
- Beautful. I loved it. 5/5
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