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Hard, cold, broken ground
Covered in the falling snow.
Here a graveyard lies.
- by Emilie_Aututmn |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/10/2009 |
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- Title: Winter Graveyard Haiku
- Artist: Emilie_Aututmn
- Description: Just a haiku I wrote when I was bored. Comment please!
- Date: 04/10/2009
- Tags: winter graveyard haiku
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Mimi-chan Uchiha - 08/08/2009
- haha normally I wiuld agree with blanketyblank, but this IS a haiku. Describing that stuff wuld defeat the point. Awesome job with such a restricted length
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- Emilie_Aututmn - 06/24/2009
- It is a haiku though... Not much I can do with three lines...
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- Emilie_Aututmn - 05/07/2009
- Wow. Thanks for the ideas. I really appreciate it. =)
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- iloveblanketyblank - 04/12/2009
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Be more descriptive. Answer the readers' questions such as: How hard was the ground? How cold? How did it come to be broken? How much snow was covering the ground? How fast was the snow falling?
Also, describe more what the graveyard looks like. Answering those questions would give your readers a more vivid picture of the graveyard. - Report As Spam
- Ak WubWub - 04/11/2009
- really dark D=
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