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I'm beautiful, I'm glorious, I’ll make you very happy,
When you see me your mood turns the opposite of crabby.
I could be for a minute, or maybe a whole day,
You might just end up saying, it takes my breath away!
Plink plat, pitter-patter; I make a lovely sound,
This should give me away; I like to fall on the ground.
Wherever I tread I leave a big, big mess,
Some people love it but I leave the others in distress.
I bring life and I give growth wherever I walk,
Patter patter-patter is my lovely talk.
When I come around, you are happy to have a roof over your head
I bet most think that when they are trying to go to bed.
I suppose I can't blame you for thinking that thought,
But my peace and happiness just isn't bought.
All that I ask is that you are glad when i come around town.
Give me a chance; I swear I wont let you down!
Just think about all that I do for you!
Think, think! You'll find it's really true.
- Title: My Rain Poem
- Artist: Kirksome
- Description: I wrote this last year... and now I face no choice but to use it for a Writing Benchmark poem. I need honest critique on how this reads... please!
- Date: 02/28/2009
- Tags: rain poem
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Comments (1 Comments)
- coca-candy - 03/24/2009
- its good, but the last stanza doesnt make sense...perhaps your talking about shoes wink
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