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One day I found a broken heart.
It was lying on the ground
In the dirt, rubble, and trash -
Pierced and bleeding with a silver dart
I stared at that heart and wondered
Who had taken this heart,
Cared for it, loved it, held it,
Only to take it and tear it asunder?
Tears weld in my eyes, burning
As I watched that heart beat
Futilely, desperately, trying to go on
Despite its wound, despite its hurting.
That heart is a fighter, I said.
Even with a wound so grievous
It beats, struggles to live on.
It will not be taken and beaten by the dead.
The tears fell down my cheek.
A small river on my face.
That heart is like mine;
Small, fragile, innocent and meek
Tears dripping, I took a step
And another towards the shattered
Soul left on the ground and stop.
Remembering promises left unkept.
I too was left broken.
Unable to feel the time slide by.
But my heart had stopped beating.
It was stomped on like a lost token.
My cold heart laid like a lump
Unfeeling, uncaring, and all alone.
Why open yourself to pain?
Why allow yourself to be thrown in a dump?
But looking at that heart, mine thawed
Slowly beating, feeling anew.
My heart resonated with the other
And suddenly something new had dawned.
I knelt on one knee, and took that heart
And nestled it against my own.
Gently caressing, healing our pain
Knowing forever we will never part.
Healed and new, always together
Beating as one, loud and strong.
No pain, no doubt, or struggle.
We walk together, free and unfettered.
- by Taijia_Sango |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/20/2009 |
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- Title: Salvation of a Broken Heart
- Artist: Taijia_Sango
- Description: This is a poem about finding a heart struggling to survive having been broken, possible numerous times. The Narrator then saves the heart which in turn then saves his/her own heart.
- Date: 02/20/2009
- Tags: salvation broken heart
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Comments (3 Comments)
- peramene - 02/26/2009
- Much better. Narrator's salvation is now central to the piece, and the dismount is perfect. There are some spelling errors - welled, for example, is 'weld' above - that your spellcheck obviously just hiccuped over. Thank you very much. I'll be looking forward to your future work. smile
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- Taijia_Sango - 02/26/2009
- Thanks! I have changed it now so please, tell me what you think of it with the changes.
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- peramene - 02/21/2009
- The narrator's salvation isn't entirely clear. There are some apostrophes in places they don't belong. This is very good. Give it some more work in another month or so. Pay careful attention to the ending in particular, as the dismount is a little sloppy. Very interested to see more of your work. Thank you. smile
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