The Rain of a Broken soul

• Artist: The Hardcore Otaku
• Description: Read it.
  then tell me what you think.
  
• Date: 12/22/2008
• Tags: rain broken soul

The rain...
I watch it fall...
Little droplets...
crashing to the earth...
Like the feelings that I pour...
All the sadness.
Hatred...
The feeling of no one there...
No one to help pick up the pieces I've lost.
The entity within me has been shattered,
To the rain before me...
I've lost it all....
And I've nothing to live for....
But I keep on living.
So painful.
Tourture so excruciating...
Why?
Why am I always looking to the rain?
Hope?
Love Maybe?
I don't know...
You try to figure it out.
I'll just wait until the rain,
So dark and cold,
swallows me whole.

Oh,
and a word of advise.
Don't go down this path...
Its far to painful.

Comments

[oxygeNATION]

I feel a bit of sadness going on here...

[Calvicus]

I can feel the emotions you put behind it, and that's the most important thing. However the form of the poem splits the points your trying to make a bit incoherent. Just work on form a bit. Like, is it free verse? That's the only way i could see it fitting.

[Miaka99]

This Is really Good