Extra Points for Originality

• Artist: OuEstLaCraie
• Description: A poem on love and writing. How can you express how you feel in words, when it's been done so many times before?
  That's what I want to know.
• Date: 11/29/2008
• Tags: extra points originality love writing

Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day,
As the poets have already done before?
Or perhaps pledge my love from a balcony,
Even if our families aren’t really at war?

Are quotes and rhymes and witty lines
The way to catch your eye?
Or is simple conversation good enough
To compete with Shakespeare on the sly?

Are my dreams just imagined scenes,
Formed from the life I live while awake?
Or are these scenes my reality-to-be?
Is there some truth to imaginings believed fake?

Could it be I’m coming on too strong
When I’m not even sure I can flirt?
Should I revert to my sarcasm and scathing barbs
And pray you’re amused, not hurt?

Would hiding behind Atwood, Frost, or Keats
Be preferable to relying on my own mind?
Am I really as good as I’m believed to be?
Does unique still mean one of a kind?

Why were they all able to put down in script
The words I so desperately need?
Maybe I’ll just borrow a line or two…
And pray that you don’t read.

Comments

[Kagurome]

AWESOME, it's really cool how you thought about this.

[Daionii]

Oh crud, I forgot to add - I think the title is brilliant :3

[Daionii]

This is great ^_^ I think it's a good idea to write about! I think all of us have thought "Damn, that's been said before.." XD I especially love the last stanza, it made me smile.
The only problem I have is the third stanza D: I don't see how it fits with the rest.. though I'm sure it does, it's probably just me being dumb :3
Enjoy your 5 from me =D

[OuEstLaCraie]

Thank you so much! I always seem to get a little funky with my rhyming--I'll try to work on that : ]

[Figmented Imagination]

Friendly advice- some of the rhythms are a little weird, so it kind of makes it sound like you were working really hard and gave up or something....
But really, it's fabulous. All most all of it fits together and the message is strong, clear, but meaningful and deep at the same time, I give you five/five! <3

[Alibis of the Heart]

Omfg!!!!! It's freaking genius!!!! I think that this poem itself expresses the feelings you wished to covey!!!!! xd
If you don't mind could you check out mine? I'd like your advice, please. smile

[glax15]

Ommiogsh, that's freakin' awesome! xD I'd love it if a guy wrote that for me! ^^