why am i so alone?

• Artist: HoRnEd_SpiRiT
• Description: poem. read and comment please, it's only my second. the other one is submitted by my other charecter "jeff labbe is single" called "love"
  this is my second poem, as i said...YES, I SEE THE ERRORS IN STRUCTURE, BUT IT"S A POEM, SO SCREW YOU, HATERS LOL! no, plz leave all good AND bad comments. i need feedback.
• Date: 10/04/2008
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Why am i so alone?
in this great big world of ours.
i sit and stare in the room
Thats been empty for hours.

Because you've left me by myself,
all for Mr. Perfect.
'cause he never hurts himself,
never loses his confident smirk.

"He's so great jeff, you'd love him!"
you write me notes in class
asking to still be my friend.
I sit and give you a smile,
though inside i want to die.

Because if I were mad, or angry,
you'd be unhappy.
and i am not bitter,
and i want you to be happy.

so enjoy Mr.Perfect,
'cause he's a better man than I.
Besides, you would have me much longer anyways,
'cause I'm about to die.

Comments

[hshaver13]

It's writen well aside from a few gramatical errors. Very deep. I've been on the other side of that before and I've been around things like this for quite a time. It really hurts from either side when one knows another is hurting if you've really got something with the other person.