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One Fallen Angel
My fallen angel,
your wings ablaze
in time you fell,
through a darkest haze
The brightest of lights
in the darkest nights,
now you simmer,
as your light seems dimmer
Gloomy dark hallways,
they frighten me so
you're not there anymore,
I'm in need of your glow
Creatures of death,
they stalk me unending,
It was only with you that
I could draw safe breath
Death is calling for me,
and you aren't here,
It's your fault I'm dying
My heart's filled with tears
I see the angels,
I'll lead them to your door
There's no escaping,
no mercy anymore
We could've been forever,
now it will be never
- by Daisuke Zth |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/19/2008 |
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Comments (3 Comments)
- MJgwarrocker66 - 07/06/2009
- 4/5. not bad. take a look at my poems and tell me what you think by leaving comments
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- villaabe - 09/19/2008
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really well written, i mean almos perfection.. just a few things
1. In the second stanza delete "You were" works better starting from the.
2. The word "a" really doesn't work in the 4th stanza. Try deleting it, that would work better.
other than that good man, the best i have read. 5/5 - Report As Spam
- Asve - 09/19/2008
- Bravo! 5/5
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