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1) This was the first haiku I ever attempted, it isn't very good. Guess the subject biggrin
Powerful hindlegs,
Delicate front; letting you
jump, canter and buck.
2) This one is my most recent haiku, and was written when I was feeling sad. You can tell.
Words which freedom give
to this long forgotten soul,
my reason to live
3) This is personally my favourite of the three, and I wrote it to fit into a story I was writing. The story also worked quite well.
A forbidden Love,
Youth’s grand trap and greatest joy,
Causes the most pain.
- by Barmy Bunny |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/21/2008 |
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- Title: A Collection
- Artist: Barmy Bunny
- Description: 3 haikus, which were written at different times and with very different subjects
- Date: 07/21/2008
- Tags: haiku
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Beautifully Broken Smile - 07/21/2008
- I was never a fan of haikus, but very well done =3
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- Atheshya - 07/21/2008
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All of the syllables are right, which is good. My only problem with any of these is the rhyme in the second one - haiku aren't generally supposed to have rhymes.
My favourite is probobly the first one - I like how it describes a horse. - Report As Spam
- shockcollar - 07/21/2008
- good poems u made sure to have to correct amount of syllables to =D
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