Pain

• Artist: ClassicFAIL_TM
• Description: A poem I wrote about a year ago. I like how it turned out~ ^^
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: pain

Pain is a fight.
It is a goodbye,
A memory,
A loss,
A beginning,
And an end,
A struggle.
It is love,
Motivation,
And hope.
Pain is sorrow,
Loss,
Sadness,
Struggle,
And stress,
Pain brings hope,
Love,
And dreams,
Pain brings beginnings,
Life,
And Death
Pain is not just a physical, destructive thing,
It is what keeps us together,
And brings friends that will stand by your side,
Friends that smile,
Friends that laugh,
Friends that protect
And Friends that care.

Comments

[Aen Veritate]

It flows rather well, and it's simplicity gives it a more profound effect. As Emma stated, the repetition gives it a nice rhythm.

I enjoyed it! *5'd*

[XX-Emma Uchiha-XX]

The way you repeated things gives the poem a nice rhythm. It's incredibly easy to understand, and it's very true. 5/5.

[Ryan Russell]

I like it. It reads quickly and there is no real rhythm to be broken for the most part. I do, however, wonder about pain being an end. I believe the end of pain is an end, but pain itself can only bring the begining of an end (if you know what I mean)

[catty_girl_09]

I like it, strangely...sorry, I'm too tired to give constructive criticism...lol.