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throwing my daggers
in the dark, I took
a stab at your love,
in a daze
when you switched on the lights
and smiled.
though, to be completely fair,
i had peeked under my blindfold
a time or two,
trying to convey my intentions
with not-so-subtle subtleties
that seemed to fly over
your silly, oblivious head,
leaving me to hop around
like an injured bird.
but the bird flew again,
oh, it soared.
how stunned i was when,
after brandishing my blades,
i saw your face illuminated, and your smile,
and your hand, which held
my dagger with a gentle, steady grip.
- by PandaEnlightenment |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/15/2008 |
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- Title: Violence is not the answer.
- Artist: PandaEnlightenment
- Description: sorry about the unusual title, which has nothing to do with the poem's content. it was an untitled poem, so i figured daggers, blades, violence, no.
- Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: dagger love blindfold
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Darkplace_Assistant - 01/18/2009
- Violence is not the answer,but the question and the answer is YES.Nice poem,i guess making violence seem graceful is another way to go.
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- PandaEnlightenment - 07/17/2008
- ^^; glad you like it, m'dear. <33
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- Rad Disease - 07/17/2008
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Its FANTABULOUS! (hammi has been making up a lot of words lately....>> wink
AWE! I LOVE YOU SO MUCH! - Report As Spam
- PandaEnlightenment - 07/16/2008
- Thank you. ^^ i actually didn't know what Softer World was until I read that comment and Googled it. ><
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- Toastbusters - 07/15/2008
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Intriguing, and I like the Softer World stab at phrasing.
It just needs polish - draft, re-draft, peer edit, draft, final. Your first piece really shouldn't be your last piece - for error's sake and creativity's sake. Ulysses certainly wasn't written once. - Report As Spam
- PandaEnlightenment - 07/15/2008
- thank you! glad you think so. c;
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- Canto Alla Vita - 07/15/2008
- The title is actually quite fitting, good job!
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