Forgiveness

• Artist: HrtBrkr
• Description: A piece that was actually inspired from a cool night breeze blowing through my window. I get motivated from weird things I suppose...anyways enjoy.
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: poem freestyle forgiveness defiant

The Night air fondles my body,
Its cool hands caressing me.
My skin tingles with excitement,
Like a thousand spiders scurrying across.
I stand there, baring it all to the world.
I am defenseless, yet strong.
Vulnerable, but somehow confident.
I cannot hide my faults, nor would I want to.
The world crashes down around me, however, I stand proud.
This is a form with so many defects,
And I am happy.
All of the mistakes I make, the entirety of my sins,
Washed away.
I stand before my creator, and all of the world,
Admitting that I am a vile creature.
Only by the grace of one thing can I continue with my life.
The one thing that lets me move on,
Forgiveness.

Comments

[Toastbusters]

It's good - considerably better than most of the trash I'm seeing uploaded today.
It's not sparkling, it doesn't dazzle, but it provokes a bit of ethos on my end, and certainly some catharsis on yours.
Those first three lines, though, very vivid. Sexual and beastly, nature vs. nature; I enjoyed that.