Cancer

• Artist: Mrs_Black_Bear
• Description: This poem was inspired by my own family history of breast cancer along with several friends and teachers struggles with it.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: cancer awarness disease family strugle

It starts with one cell
thats all it takes
to obliterate
dreams of family
or of being the prom queen
It multiplies and spreads
It can be in skin or in your head
It can stop a woman from
being able to breast feed her kid
or a man from producing healthy sperm
Once diagnosed the meds you take
turns your hair to balding fate
You become weak and unable to move
You cry at night about the things you will loose
Dreams turn to nightmares and hopes turn to dust
I can be in your family's history or maybe a random thing
some have hope of remissions others two months to live
today the work on a way to cure the cell that can bring death
so you should wear sunscreen and if your a girl or a guy do your monthly checks
if a lump is found or you just don't feel right see a doctor and you might save your life

Comments

[Mrs_Black_Bear]

But this one doesn't do that, at least not when I read it 0.0 it does have a beat though...

[Convoluted Logic]

Okay, so I don't sound like a b***h:
I also have a history of Cancer in my family.
In fact, I have a poem about my experience up right now in the arenas.
So now that you know I'm not judging from the gallery, let me give you my opinion:

This isn't so good. You rhyme sometimes and then you don't, and then you do and then you don't. This throws off the rythym and takes the attention away from the meaning of your words. Freeform all you like- but don't get people stuck on a pattern.

[~Kasai Kitsune~]

wow amy 0.0 that is... so good! 0.0

[Tibix]

very good i give it a 5 star when i write my poems i dont ryme either i just go with the flow of words that come to mind oh and if you choose check out my poems too i have 2 you dont have to vote 5 but know they have meaning too

[Mrs_Black_Bear]

Please leave comments if your going to rate this one poorly, this one is very personal to me and I think it is done rather well. Also I am a freelance emotional poet which means my poems do not rhyme most of the time since that is the style I wright in. Thank you.