"Untitled"

• Artist: writingdreamhorror
• Description: A poem in which I wrote, please comment and rate. Also give me constructive criticism please.
• Date: 09/10/2009
• Tags: poem rhyme theme syllabal

My life is a bottle with the cap turned tight.
Dancing through my dreams with all of my might.
If only you knew how much I try to fight.
And how hard it is to seek the light.
Things of beauty tempting to bite.
When everyone is prying in night.
As if no one can truly see from this height.
To cut down trees with winds of hot white.
That is not to destroy, but do what is right.

Comments

[Akorn23]

i think this is really good but maybe you could find other ryming words in some places so it makes more sense