The Forest

• Artist: Cottoncandyocbra3
• Description: A somewhat livelier and more whimsical poem, to dispel the ideas that I am naught but an "emo metal poser". :)
• Date: 12/12/2008
• Tags: forest

As I walked past the forest fair,
And I breathed in the florid air,
They spoke to me, my senses touch,
Whisp'ring dreams of joy and such,
Carrying the sun on top of their backs,
The glistening radiance calls to relax,

I drift along the day so sweet,
Their brown-earth roots under my feet,
Guiding my eyes to skies above,
rests in their bough a wondrous dove,
The ants dance merry jubilee,
Atop the ethereal wooded sea,

Flowers bloom in summer's arm,
In captivation, my mind they charm,
beautiful sprites dance on the ground,
This treasure trove of nature found,
I stare in wonder and disbelief,
At this warming soul of respite relief.

Comments

[Octavius_theForgotten]

pretty sick 5/5 hey umm comment and rate mine too plz

[whitejade13]

It is a bit different from your other poems. I like it.

[scitama]

Finally, I've found a great poem! Really like the descriptions, the rhyming was great!!, and you stuck to a theme. Very good writing and flow.

[Casca 7]

Your description made me lol. For the poem, it's a good one. It gives nice description and leads one into the picture you are trying to paint. There is one problem with it. It doesn't feel honest. "of joy and such" doesn't give me that sense of expounding energy and happiness that I should feel or even a simple and quiet joy. Better to be honest and no one like you, than play the crowd. But people do like you, so it's win win. ^_^

[iiReina]

very good! biggrin you should write more poems like these; they're not so dark.

[Bleuraven123]

told you you had a talent for words(if i haven't, i'm tellin you now)!! ^^
yes, its marvellous and i can already taste the forest just by reading this...

[LadyKrystine]

Nice flow, pretty words. The meter and flow is good. I like it.

4/5