- Princess Lori that day wore her best swimsuit. She called it Lucky. Lori tied her long golden locks in a bun and dove into the clear waters known as Moon Lake. She would touch the ground and go back to the surface. But the deeper you got into the water, the murkier the color got. The princess felt something hard under the water. She pushed her foot. Lori heard a snap. The noise was followed by a sharp pain that felt like a claw grabbed her foot. After what seemed like forever, it had only been 2 mins. She knew it was the end. Her lungs were on fire. Her foot was bleeding so bad.She cried. Her tears merged with the lake. She saw a blurred face above the surface. Lori waved her hand to see if he noticed and would help her. But the man just stood there.With her last breath she mouthed the words "Good Bye" to the stranger. Sir Will was the first to know of her death. He informed the King and Queen. They cried and cried. 5 years later they had another baby. Her name was Melody. But, the girl was really a boy.
- by Insane Rena |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/12/2009 |
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- Title: P.M. the letter 2
- Artist: Insane Rena
- Description: how she died, really sad i cried!
- Date: 10/12/2009
- Tags: letter
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Insane Rena - 12/02/2009
- greenkazoo123, there is no pm letter 1.... this is just my second attempt at it.
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- greenkazoo123 - 11/30/2009
- Wow. I really want to see P.M. the letter 1. If there is one.
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- Insane Rena - 10/19/2009
- thanks!
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- Crystal Dragon Jesus - 10/18/2009
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Also, some corrections
whore her best swimsuit = wore her best swimsuit
deeper you got into the water = deeper she got into the water
more in til she heard it snap = more until she heard it snap
clawed hand grabbed her foot = clawed hand grabbing her foot
Lori moved her hand to, = Lori waved her hand,
With her last breath, she = With her last breath she
her name was to be Melody. But, the girl was really a boy= Her name was to be Melody, but the girl was really a boy. - Report As Spam
- Crystal Dragon Jesus - 10/18/2009
- Nice, and a very good hook for the story of Melody.
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- critic-the-homeless - 10/13/2009
- It pretty good. A good summary on how she died.
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