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I sat in my school's cafe...silent... my friends talked about their boyfriends and how great they were...i could not join them...i had no boyfriend...i had no one...my mom had just died of cancer and my father....well...he just got put on trial for murder...he left the country. I looked down at my food to notice that i was crying My friend Kelly looked over to me with her bright blue eyes and said to me..."are you ok?!" i did not answer her she fliped her long beautiful blond hair out of her face "please tell me..." she said I still didnt answer...i never told them about my dad...then my other friend Lily, my best friend, said to me "if you dont want to tell us thats fine" she smiled and put an arm around my shoulder. I wish i could tell them but they probably wouldnt be my firends after that...maybe Lily...
After school i used to get picked up by my Dad...but...nevermind...so now i walked home...it was 25 blocks...but it doesnt matter i always got to go home to my pictures...i loved to take pictures with my mom...they were very special to me....they were...we took pictures of animals...moutians...and so much more...huh? i stoped walking and looked back. i had the feeling i was being watched but no one was there...i went on walking again but then i heard someone running in the forest i stoped and turned to my right. i looked at the forest for a long time but i saw no one. no one...was there? i said to myself i went on walking i finally got home. i lived alone now...so very lonely...i sat down at my kitchen tabel and started my homework i read out loud " (3,9) m=2 hmm...too easy! the answer is y+-8=2(x+3)" i finished my homework in under 20 minutes. i started to make dinner chicken dumplings. i heard a noise outside, i looked out the window and saw no one i started to cook again but then a heard a chrasing noise outside i was frozen with fear i couldnt move i told myself i was hearing things but i knew that wasnt true. i started to the door ever so slowly i didnt know what was outside it could be a murder or maybe a robber? i dont know...i got to the door and opened it slowly...i saw a bat and the ground and i picked it up i walked around my my big white house...i saw no one...i droped the bat and ran back inside my house i shut the door and locked it. i went around my house and locked every door and very window i even blocked the fire place so no one could get in....it was getting late so i went up to bed.... i got changed into a pick tanktop and white sweat pants...i was still very nervous about the noise i lay on my bed starting to fall asleep...sleep...sleep...sleep...
i woke up at 3:00 A.M. i heard something down stairs...i slowly got up and walked down the stairs slowly i heard the noise from the family room i walked slowly to the room no one...i turned around to see a boy he was my age with beautiful brown hair and gold eyes staring at me i steped back he reached toward me and said dont be scared...im not going to hurt you...i promise... his voice was so soft and gental. i started to back away when i bumped into something...or someone...i turned to see another boy but he had sharp teeth and red eyes he put a hand over my mouth..and...and!
i shot up from my bed..."it was...just a dream...?"
ok thats the end of part one! emo
- by iloveyourmomsllama14 |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 01/18/2009 |
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- Title: ~love story~ part 1
- Artist: iloveyourmomsllama14
- Description: that math prob is real! it really is! anywhos! i have to make it into parts the story is too big!
- Date: 01/18/2009
- Tags: love story
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Comments (6 Comments)
- mangakitty03 - 10/27/2009
- luv
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- alainlalaland - 01/21/2009
- This would make for a fabulous story if the grammar and punctuation was cleaned up a bit! 4/5
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- alainlalaland - 01/21/2009
- This would make for a fabulous story if the grammar and punctuation was cleaned up a bit! 4/5
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- CalvinRexx - 01/19/2009
- 'Dad' should not be capitalized unless it starts a sentence. 'I' is ALWAYS capitalized. I didn't seen any sign of an apostrophe in any of the words that needed them. You also over used the period. Where you use '...' could be replaced with a comma. And you end sentences with more periods than necessary, making the entire story look like one giant run-on sentence.
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- Skadi Sundermount - 01/18/2009
- well there certainly is a lot of drama going on but i just dont feel like i can realate to the character. Maybe if you made her a little more 3D, you know, give her some depth. Actions speak louder than words after all...Which is kind of ironic considering a story pretty much is words...But you get what I'm saying right? Of course you do.
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- la Reina de calabaza - 01/18/2009
- OMG this is such a great story! im definently gonna be your fan! I just love it! biggrin
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