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wahmbulance wahmbulance wahmbulance Cold slaped Angie across the face, teh kick did nothing to Cold but make him work harder. Angie cried and tried many many times to scream but over and over nothing came out. Th eonly thing you could hear where the moans and cries of Cold having a joy ride with Angie. Lover Couldnt do anything. He felt so bad and horrifed. His eyes filled with tears cause the pain he say Angie in. He screamed and elled at Cold and tried to pull adn push him off. Thats when Cold got up walked over to his black bag and pulled out his brown pocket knife and stabbed Lover right in the heart. Angie cried even harder as she watch Lover bleed out to death. Then Cold went back to his joy ride with Angie. Mean while the cops had looked everywhere. They called Angie's friends and told them she was nowhere to be found. they asked the police where they are and they said there is old burned down warehouse about 10 miles up the road from you, did you looke there? No we didnt even know about the warehouse. But by the time the cops got there they had left ony leaving bhind the dead lifeless body of Lover.
TO BE FINSHED.........................
- by blackdeath144 |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/22/2008 |
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- Title: A STORY Part: 5
- Artist: blackdeath144
- Description: Its sad but true. I hope no one has to go though these things.
- Date: 07/22/2008
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Mistress Claudia Balzac - 01/07/2009
- Umm...this is "non-fiction"?
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- s h ii m a p a n - 08/05/2008
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Please watch your spelling and grammar.....
Also try to be descriptive now and then.
Instead of saying "...He walked over to his black bag and pulled out his brown pocket knife and stabbed Lover right in the heart." Describe the way 'Cold' walked or the expression//feelings he had at that time.
Would he have a sadistic expression? Or would he be happy?
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- computercat5 - 07/22/2008
- It's sad that there's all that sadness in the world. All of the good, kind people usually have something wrong done to them by bad people. No matter how many are put in jail, there's always going to be more.
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