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"I'll be right back. Don't worry, I'm just making a call," he said to her, and kissed her softly on her cheek.
Amy smiled. He was the best guy she had ever been with. She leaned back on the wall. Her black, sleek bob looked marvellous with her bright green eyes under the moonlight. She wished he'd never go away. Never to be taken away from her.
Suddenly, she heard a bang. It was Lucas. And he lay on the ground beside the phoneboothe. She ran to him. He had been shot.
"Oh, Lucas," she sobbed. "Are you alright? Please, please don't go away."
He smiled weakly at her. "It's okay. I'll be alright. Just promise me one thing, Amy. Run as fast as you can, away from this place. Go far away, so that they don't come after you."
"What? What do you mean? You're shot, Lucas. I should be calling the ambulance. Who's coming, Lucas? Who is it?" she asked, so confused, and so scared.
He started to get up, but he was shot near his chest, and it hurt so much. "Amy, there's no time to explain. Just go," he said hastily, looking to see if no one was coming.
She was so confused, and speechless. There was a kind of fear in Lucas's eyes, that she had to listen to him for his sake.
"I love you, Amy. I want you to always know that," he said, thinking that they would be his final words.
Their lips touched for the last time, and they parted. Neither did know what fate had in store for them next. Neither did know what would happen to them in the future. Neither knew if they were going to meet each other again.
to be continued
- by x x --- LADY c o f f e e |
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- | Submitted on 06/08/2009 |
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- Title: They Parted
- Artist: x x --- LADY c o f f e e
- Description: its just a sneak peak from a book I might write. please comment. i'd like to know if it's pretty impressive by a 13 year old, (thats me!) ;)
- Date: 06/08/2009
- Tags: love parted
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Comments (4 Comments)
- x x --- LADY c o f f e e - 06/10/2009
- wow!!! i totally loved ur version of her description!! hehe, thanks though! yeah, I'll be coming to u 4 advice too.. smile thanks! im glad u liked my sneek peek! wink
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- DeniHazelnut - 06/08/2009
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...She leaned back in the hall. Her short black hair appeared brighter under the moonlight shadow, and her eyes seemed to catch a different glimpse, making her light skin pass unnoticed. She was just_______(you put the age here) but already in love. She wished he would never go, she wished he could be there, with her, for ever...
That's just an idea. But again I AM SO IMPRESSED BY THE TALENT YOU HAVE IN THIS. If you ever need advise, you know where to find me. wink - Report As Spam
- DeniHazelnut - 06/08/2009
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It is so cool that you are just 13 and already loving the fabulous world of writing. It is really impressive, I must said. I like the idea, it kinda reminds me of the song "Moonlight Shadow" Mmm just one suggestions. I just recomend to use a differnt apporach to the girl's description; you could make a better picture if you describe her as:
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- tommy_gurl17 - 06/08/2009
- nooooo!he cant die!not yet! razz
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