A short life lived

• Artist: avaianna
• Description: Reane woke up that morning and it never once went through her mind "I may die today" untill The man with ash blonde hair murdered her
• Date: 04/17/2011
• Tags: short life lived

Reane ran up to the steel door with a chain lock. She tryed to get away but it was impossibal. He walked up slowly with a grin on his smug face he grabed at Reana's wrist. Reane tugged away runing in any direction possibal. But she couldn't get away. The man approched her. grabed her by her soulders and picked her up slightly just tio throw her to the ground. He bent down and Jamed a slive black-handled knife into her small defenceless stomach. Reane couldn't belive it she institivly put on hand to put pressure on the stab wound. There was a short moment that real life didn't matter all she thought was her life and how she would never graduate. Realisation seemed to smack realitly into the moment. She stood up and yelled 'Who are you?" he smiled and awnsered 'YOUR WORST NIGHTMARE!" Reane fell to the cold wet side walk. The man put a faint smile on his face and said 'I TOLD YOU I WOULD GET YOU" Reane didn even know this man, He was tall and had ash blonde hair. He put a faint, sleek smile on his face reavling perfect white teeth. He turned around and walked out of the dark, damp alley.Reane closed her eyes she couldn't keep them open but it was impossibal.Reane felt the cold, black air rush up to her like a predator. Reane didn't now what was happing but she just kept falling farther and farther into the darkness.

Comments

[Lraihly]

There's the grammer-check, but the only other thing is that I was wishing to know what the man looked like. I was thinking, "Is he tall? What's he wearing? His eye color? Or possibly his hair color?" One of those described could make him appear even more 'creepy' or whatever you want him to be thought of as. 4/5

[Irenex3]

Spelling sad Mechanics?

[avaianna]

thankyou

[Monsieur Lucas]

i like it, but insead of "your worst nightmare" you could say no answer and insted of "i tol you i would get you" you could say "i told you" in a deep, icy voice