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The monster cried in pain but it didn’t give up. Suddenly I feel like I was being lifted into the ground, then I saw his hands on top of my head. I could feel the wind rushing against me as he throws me in that air. I screamed in pain as my back touches the hard ground. I can’t stand up everything in me was in pain, I was loosing hope. I could feel the ground tremble with every footsteps he make. He grabbed my ankle and held me upright, I was struggling my way out, but he’s to strong. Anger filled my heart as I saw the vision of the girl. Back-off, don’t touch her, don’t go near her, I said through my teeth. My body was shaking, my eyes were on fire, fist balled tightly, anger filled my thoughts. I pull my self up and grab his right arm and crunch it off. He let go of my ankle but I bite him even tighter. A loud growl covered the place once again. I could taste his blood on my mouth then I let go. I spitted the blood in my mouth, as the monster faced me. His eyes were filled with pain but his body was trembling with anger. He jumped towards me and grabbed my shoulder I could feel his nails sink into my flesh, I screamed in pain. We fell in the ground he’s on top of me; I looked in my side and saw the girl. She was staring at us with calm eyes, then I saw her smile it was so passionate and fulfilling that I can’t take my eyes off her. But the monster is still alive and he’s above me, I kicked him off me. As he falls on the ground I manage to stand up and run away. I was father away from the girl so he wouldn’t give interest into her anymore. But when I looked back he was standing and staring towards the girl. I stopped from running and goes back to where he is. But he comes towards the girl, his face was filled with evil.
~to be continued ...
- by RockPunkPrince |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/05/2009 |
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- Title: Trapped (part 12)
- Artist: RockPunkPrince
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Description:
have you ever been trapped in you own dream? your own world? somewhere anything can happen ...
~please read the first parts, first :)
pls. rate ill accept any criticism i know im not that good with writing yet tell me any suggestions anything to make it more interesting :D
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(part 13, 14 and 15 will be delayed in posting no exact date when im going to post it ill just pm anyone who wants to read it so just tell me if you want to read it :D) - Date: 07/05/2009
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Comments (2 Comments)
- robyn_cullen - 07/16/2009
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you are really good!
but a quick comment about your writing style,
i noticed that you use the word " I " in the begining of most of your sentences. luv your writing, keep it up! - Report As Spam
- Lady Deana - 07/14/2009
- OMG YES I WANT TO READ IT!!! ur such a good writer!!!! i love how u describe everything, and how it has romance and vilonce. my opinion says make it a little more gory. SEND ME THE REST OMG!!!!
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