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Even just with the slight breeze, Cala could feel it under her cap. Her hair blazed red in the sun, even though she had thrown dirt in it that morning to make it look brown. The man hadn't noticed yet, though.He was too busy preparing to kill her with his long sword. Then again, he didn't know it was her. He thought it was the man who had stolen his woman. But it was actually her sister. He would never know. At least, he wouldn't if he sliced her head off.
The man drew up his sword, two fingers sliding down to the end of the blade. Then he cut himself on his fingertip, the blood curving its way down to his elbow. His eyes were filled with rage, clouded with exhaustion, and gleaming with revenge. He looked scary. Scary, despite what she had seen throughout her life. Downright scary.
The man charged at her, his sword high up in the air, and shouted, "To the death!" as loud as she thought he possibly could. Cala took in a deep, noisy breath through her nose. She sighed silently, and rose her bow and arrow. "To the death," she agreed in a whisper.
- by Denied Silver Star |
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- | Submitted on 05/04/2009 |
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- Title: Mischief at Work
- Artist: Denied Silver Star
- Description: This is about a girl-Cala-who has to be moved away from her rich parents to a dump when women weren' as superior as men[In theory]So she dresses up like a man and lives life like that.She meets a jackass who she falls in love with, and to prove him she gets her breath-taking sister and has her pretend she's "his" girlfriend.The man gets pissed and does everything in his power to get her sister, but he can't.So in this part is where he tries to kill her. Please, give me some opinions.
- Date: 05/04/2009
- Tags: mischief work
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- Denied Silver Star - 05/04/2009
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- Nightmayer19 - 05/04/2009
- i like the idea, but profanities werent necessary in your description... it kinda diminishes the entire overview... anyways, keep working at it, i have a feeling youll pull this little bit into an amazing story!~
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