The Begining (Edited Version)

• Artist: Naru912
• Description: This is a story I started about a year ago, but no one replyed to it so I've never continued it. Tell me what u think and I might continue it. This story is a mix of fantasy that was inspired by me from two different books, Eagon, and The Edge Chronicles. Every now and again u'll read about one of the characters from one the the two books, like a bandabear or a dragon. Enjoy and read on, and remember to always tell me what u think, thanx.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: adventure fantasy elves trolls

Prologue

Before......

Clinging tightly to a bundle Whisper ran through the woods, behind her, a Seeker was in hot pursue. With the moon shinning brightly before her she kept running. Dashing across a stream her little feet caught a rock and she tumbled forward. The seeker was close behind now, with the last of her strength, she lifted up her bundle and called upon her powers. A bright flash for miles around shined before the world. With her last breath she calapsed to the ground.

When the seeker caught up with her it looked down in disgust, she was dead and the child gone. His master would not be happy, no not at all. Lifting up the elf, he slung her over his back. Stretching out his leathery wings he lifted into the moonlit sky and headed back to the castle.

* * * * * * *

Miles away in a small troll village in a bundle laid a little baby wrapped
in a green elf blanket. A little lock of curly blond hair clasped to his face,
upon his head a gold circlet of royalty lay. With a yawn the little child awoke, his tiny blue eyes sparkling in the moonlight. With a cry his delicate voice rang out to the world.

At a nearby tree hut a troll mother steeped out of her home. Looking around her she spotted the child, slowly she approached it. A since of magic clung the child and it scared her but she didn't care. Not that long ago she had had a little boy, but he had died from a terrible sickness. With careful hands she picked him up and carried him inside.

Stay tuned for chapter one, Cloud.

Whisper

Comments

[AngelsOfTheDarkSide]

Nice story, very fantasy like. Maybe, though, if you would make the beggining a little less like Eragon, it would be more interesting. I like the plot, though. 4/5

[Yuki of the Stars]

It sounds too much like Eragon's beggining. Sorry, but no...

[Naru912]

For all of u who corrected me on the last entry thanx. I'll try to catch those mistakes next time. I couldn't fix or delete the last one so this is the edited one.